Aren’t they too literal and too one- dimensional?
Where is their metaphor and their surprise?

Again then
I confess,

“I am a poor simple writer of plain words
No poet in the most imaginative and interesting sense
A man who writes his own truth
And lets the words lie on the page
As if they were his own inaudible breath.”

Shalom Freedman

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